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Spring Haikuton '08 by ~Formel:iconFormel:

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1/3/08
mailbox affection
over-filled, love letters'
torrential downpour

2/3/08
it's over
my heart is empty
vacancy

3/3/08
On the way home
we found a yellow feather
”Lots of love, from March.”

4/3/08
fourth day of the month
Who knew these birds could sing
in tune with the wind

5/3/08
deadly sin
clouds in puddles
vanity

6/3/08
embracing
branches intertwine
lovers' thrist

7/3/08
white by black
winter has not passed
yesterday

8/3/08
when you look at me
the stitches holding my heart
come undone

9/3/08
intimidating
blooms burst forth in all colour
passionately

10/3/08
frozen bird
the night is cruel still
vengeful

11/3/08
snowdrops cry
red tears in the sun's
first true rays

12/3/08
contours imprinted
on my tactile memory
fade with time

13/3/08
thirteenth, luck-less day
ripped wrapping, pricked thumb
your present, messed

14/3/08
orange to red
thin yellow-green then blue-gray
ends with midnight black

15/3/08
they broke off chains
for OUR brighter future
sealed it with blood

16/3/08
blindingly bright sky
but the weatherman said "bad"
damn lying forecast

17/3/08
blackbirds spit
curses at me for
whistling back

18/3/08
search phrase:
love poem, modern-day
spring frenzy

19/3/08
forests bud
unviolated
silence

20/3/08
diamonds
roll on tree leaves -
dazzling dew

21/3/08
rising moon
casts vast expanses
in silver

22/3/08
falling sun
sunnyside-up
in the sky

23/3/08
a black stray
closes green eyes getting
sunsoaked

24/3/08
she caught
him staring again
intently

25/3/08
lonely crowds
bloom white flowers
red plum trees

26/3/08
two hearts beat
syncronized to
one ta-dam

27/3/08
blindingly
haloed in sun rays
you arrive

28/3/08
fraying heart
only you can stitch
it anew

29/3/08
pink dyed wings
tow blanket of the
richest black

30/3/08
rain falls hard
drips off roof
down the drain

31/3/08
farewell
is bitterest tears
on tongue
©2008-2009 ~Formel
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EDIT: spelling errors ^^;

My entry for the Spring Haikuton '08
here => [link]

1/3/08
title: Valentine
this piece gave me lots of trouble, it didn't want to work...
I changed the word order a bit, I hope it's better

2/3/08
title: Hotel
my first 3-5-3 haiku, I don't know if it's alright
changed title

3/3/08
title: Letter

4/3/08
title: Diary

5/3/08
title: 8th Sin

6/3/08
title: Trees

7/3/08
title: Fields
English syllable count

8/3/08
title: Fray
alright, I decide I won't change it
inspiration: Unique - Mi van a nevedben? (they are very good) [link]
"fesleni sebeim" = my wounds fray

9/3/08
title: Threat
I wanted the first and last lines to be one word... there

10/3/08
title: Vengeful

11/3/08
tite: Dawn

12/3/08
titel: Touch
inspiration: [link]

13/3/08
title: Birthday
my mother's birthday, she was born on the 13, March, a Friday :giggle: I am so jealous

14/3/08
title: Dusk
how the sky changes on a clear day

15/3/08
title: Revolution
for the 15, March 1848 Hungarian Revolution

16/3/08
title: Weatherman

17/3/08
title: Rivalry
I like annoying blackbirds in the garden :giggle:

18/3/08
title: Net Love

19/3/08
title: Silence
my shortest one so far, only 5 words

20/3/08
title: Dew
inspiration: comment and small discussion with :iconhaikukitty: [link]

21/3/08
title: Moon

22/3/08
title: Sun

23/3/08
title: Sunsoaked
I saw the word "sunsoaked" on a T-shirt, it reminded me of cats sleeping in the sun

24/3/08
title: Noise
I wanted it to represent "noise" but it doesn't... I left the title alone ^^;

25/3/08
title: Ezra
Ezra Pound: In a Station of the Metro
my main inspiration for haiku

26/3/08
title: Hear

27/3/08
title: See

28/3/08
title: Heal

29/3/08
title: Pigeons
my neighbour has pigeons and they fly round and round... and when the sun is setting they are pink

30/3/08
title: Rain

31/3/08
title: Taste

pairs:
Fray - Heal
Dawn - Dusk
Silence - Noise
Sun - Moon
Touch - See - Hear - Taste - (Scent is missing)

mega update!!!
I wrote two today and the two the day before, the rest were done earlier, they just needed a bit polishing :)

I AM FINISHED WITH THE SPRING HAIKU-TON :w00t:


I am not a poet... but maybe I will have a chance to improve a bit ^^;

"your colour is red
I can see it glow when night
falls around our bed"
(Colours - Színek)

this is a lyric, and I tweaked it a bit so now it's a haiku too :D

this lyric is the property of Bonanza Banzai and Kovács Ákos (Ákos) Hungarian singer
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*HaikuKitty:iconHaikuKitty: Mar 5, 2008, 12:18:07 AM
For someone who is "not a poet" these sing remarkably well!

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~Formel:iconFormel: Mar 5, 2008, 12:40:33 AM
wow, thanks :)

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Integra: And what did you do?
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I: I'm sure the art community thanked you.
A: I like to consider myself a scathing critic. Non of my subjects survive my reviews.

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*HaikuKitty:iconHaikuKitty: Mar 6, 2008, 10:05:55 AM
I know what you mean about having trouble with a piece. Often I will be working hard on something and it just won't gel. I am doing a piece right now that is beating me up :D

I like what you have done with it, in spite of your struggles.

Like how the empty heart has a vacancy. Very clear picture.

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~Formel:iconFormel: Mar 6, 2008, 12:09:27 PM
thank you for the support :D I'm sure your problem will work out soon, they attack with the solution in the most unexpected times :)

the one with the vacancy is one of my favourites too (that sounded a bit egoistic... :XD: )

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Alucard: I had one man tell me he was a writer.
Integra: And what did you do?
A: I killed him quickly.
I: I'm sure the art community thanked you.
A: I like to consider myself a scathing critic. Non of my subjects survive my reviews.

:D
=Tangerine-Tickle:iconTangerine-Tickle: Mar 6, 2008, 5:08:28 PM
Great start, keep on writing and don't give up. :)

I'm surprised you say you're not a poet because you definitely think like one. Your words create some beautiful scenes. Keep it up!

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~Formel:iconFormel: Mar 7, 2008, 2:04:17 PM
thank you :D

--
Alucard: I had one man tell me he was a writer.
Integra: And what did you do?
A: I killed him quickly.
I: I'm sure the art community thanked you.
A: I like to consider myself a scathing critic. Non of my subjects survive my reviews.

:D
~YumeAkuma:iconYumeAkuma: Mar 8, 2008, 10:24:40 AM
Wonderful stuff, I especially love the March 8th one, I hope you don't change it because as soon as I read it I thought "Oh my god, that's exactly what happens!"

I think the poet you was hiding, but she's finally blossoming now! Haha kinda cheesy reference to spring 8D

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Sushi -
a gathering of many
pulling a disappearing act
~Yume
~Formel:iconFormel: Mar 8, 2008, 11:59:21 AM
hmm... that gives me some ideas for some future haiku... :giggle:
alright, then I won't change it... but I still think something is missing...

--
Alucard: I had one man tell me he was a writer.
Integra: And what did you do?
A: I killed him quickly.
I: I'm sure the art community thanked you.
A: I like to consider myself a scathing critic. Non of my subjects survive my reviews.

:D
~YumeAkuma:iconYumeAkuma: Mar 8, 2008, 1:24:42 PM
Well if you absolutely have to, it's fine :) Who knows, I might even like it better then =o It's your haiku after all :D Im sure it'll be lovely even if you change it.

--
Sushi -
a gathering of many
pulling a disappearing act
~Yume
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